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The existence of computers and computer technology has improved commercial enterprise in terms of information exchange.
Computers have improved business communication.

100

A mathematical mindset best suits the making of decisions that profoundly affect this company's future business relations.
Executive decisions require a mathematical mindset.

100

In order to prove that he could perform, George had to work hard like the experienced colleagues.
To prove that he could perform, George had to work hard like the experienced colleagues. (Delete 'In order')

100

Bob provided an explanation of the financial program to his supervisor.
Bob explained the financial program to his supervisor. (change 'provided an explanation of' to 'explained')

100

He was really late to his meeting due to the fact that he had to finish his report.
He was late for the meeting because he had to finish his report. (change 'due to the fact' to 'because')

200

The merchandiser found the equipment that is used for sports innovative by nature.
The merchandiser found the sports equipment innovative.

200

There are millions of customers who want the Harrods to establish a store in their city.
Millions of customers want the Harrods to establish a store in their city.

200

At this point in time a downturn in the stock market is having a really serious effect on the society of people as a whole.
A downturn in the stock market is (currently) having a serious effect on society.

200

The sales staff is honest and hard working. Basically, they never give much consideration to sitting idly about, doing nothing constructive.
Honest and hard working, the sales staff is never idle.

200

Our Web site has made available many of the things you can use for making a decision on the best dentist.
Our website presents criteria for determining (or 'deciding on') the best dentist.

300

Working as a pupil under someone who develops photos was an experience that really helped me learn a lot.
Working as a photo technician's apprentice (or 'student') was a rewarding experience.

300

The editor demonstrated some of the various ways and methods for cutting words from my essay that I had written for class.
The editor demonstrated methods for cutting words from my essay.

300

Eric Clapton and Steve Winwood formed a new band of musicians together in 1969.
Eric Clapton and Steve Winwood formed a new band in 1969.

300

The seminal work of Peter Drucker aroused interest in corporate management. This seminal is rumored to have been written as early as in 1947.
The seminal work of Peter Drucker, conceivably written in 1947, aroused interest in corporate management.

300

The pharmaceutical representative, who is certified as a nutritionist at the University of Michigan, recommends reshaping city dwellers' diet.
The pharmaceutical representative, a nutritionist at the University of Michigan, recommends reshaping city dwellers' diet.